untitled once again

[jsnowdon]

I'm right here.
Only mere feet from you.
And yet, our hearts are
a hundred miles apart.
I'm right here.
Only mere feet from you.
Breathing.
Waiting for you to take notice,
to look over and check to
make sure I'm there.
Waiting for you to realize
that I worry.
Waiting for your heart to
come back.
Waiting for you to realize
that I'm right here.
Only mere feet from you.
My heart saving a space
for you.
I'm right here.
Look.

[toby]

This feels a lot like your other untitled piece, with the repetition and straight-to-the-point attitude. Not a bad thing, I really enjoyed it, and can definitely relate to it. Keep 'em coming, you've got good stuff

[Lost]

A nice poem, like toby said I can definitely relate to it =)

[jsnowdon]

Thanks for the feedback!